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The Little Match Girl Josie- Redraw

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This is a redraw of something I drew last year that I was super proud of the time, now "OMG I MADE THIS?!" I still like the idea of it, so I decided to redraw it. I think actually like it a lot, though, I like the snow is better in the old one! Oh well, it's a different art program, and I have only ever done snow like twice XD
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Hi, I'm from ProjectComment.

First, let's start with what you have done well with this piece:

tick The anatomy is pretty decent and I can make out what each body part is.

tick Lighting wise, it's done fittingly so that the light of the flame it showed on the girl's face and hair.

tick The snow is well done and it's not distracting me from the image unlike other pieces that I have seen, there also seems to be just enough snow to give out a realistic feel to it. I have seen too many pieces that have has way too much snow that I can't even see the main focus of the art. 

tick The tears are done realistically, and not like the others where there are way too many tears on the face.

tick I would like to say that the improvement on this art is more than amazing, it's good that you have learned from then and made even better artwork.

Now, let's talk about the things that you could do better at:

x The hair I feel could be done better to give out the sort of homeless feel, make it a slight bit wiggy, but not to the point where it's downright ridiculous. 

x Most of the image is far too dark, and I find it hard to see the whole piece of art, I understand if you're trying to tell us that it's nighttime. But when I first saw this I had to squint to actually see most of it.

x I see that you're trying to pull a Gravity falls style, but the eyes I feel are too big and distract from the piece itself.

x Make it look like she's really sitting in the snow, not like she's slightly floating off of the ground. Add some snow on her feet or on the cloth she has held around her body, but only on the tips and don't put it on her head. Maybe even her hair, which would add to this as well.

x There are some light sources that just don't make any sense, the only light there should be is the moon on her hair (but just slightly, so we know that this is nighttime) and the match that she's holding in her hand. Other than that there's no need for the random beams of light. 

x Her smile bugs me, it seemed far more fitting with the way you drew it on the original. Almost like she was sighing, this one just looks out of place for me in my opinion. 

In conclusion, this is a good piece and has vastly improved from the last one that you did. However, like any other piece, there are some things that need to be improved. I apologise if it seems that there are more bad points than good ones, but remember that the bad ones are just things you can do to make this look even better in the future if you ever think of doing another redraw.